Post #1
"Boy, 7, Saves $10K for College After Starting Recycling Business"
Katie Kindelan's diction in this column piece is standard and slightly formal. In that the topic at hand, is motivating and written without contractions or slang. By beginning the article with "A 7-year-old California boy has already saved more than $10,000 for college after starting a recycling business at the age of 3." she clearly explain the achievement accomplished by a kid who started his recycling business at the age of 3. Using words such as "dad" and "mom" does not demonstrate elevated language. By using personal quotes from Ryan, the kid who earned $10,000 for college tuition, he creates a benevolent tone. Not only is he creating environmental awareness and less environmental impact by recycling over 200,000 cans and bottles, he has also donated $1,500 to the Pacific Marine Mammal Center.
The focus of this article is how his interest has sparked him to create a business in return furthering his passion. Readers would recognize Ryan as a devoted kid with strict visions because of the sentence “Though Ryan loves animals, his career goal, for now, is to become a trash collector.” A tonal shift occurs after paragraph 9. Before paragraph 10, a appreciative tone is present. Ryan has received awards and recognizes his family for the help and support. Then in paragraph 10, the tone shifts to a benevolent tone, by raising funds for the Pacific Marine Mammal Center. This tonal shift reveals how Ryan is taking his appreciation to another level. Since this business has helped him grow his passion, he is generous enough to donate over a thousand dollars.
The goal of this article is to inspire other to carry out activities to cultivate your personal interests. Appeals to ethos and logos is both incorporated. Facts on how much his recycling business has made an impact is shown and personal and other individual accounts are used within the article to allow readers to formulate the personality of Ryan. For example “The moment we met him, he instantly put a smile on everyone’s faces, Michele Hunter, the center's director of animal care, said in a statement ".The intended audience would be pre-teens because they are growing up with major external influences, and to uncover an individual’s interests would first have to be trying out things so see whether he or she likes it. This article was successful because Ryan had this cheerful mindset and after years of performing this action, it has yielded him over $10,000 for college tuition.
The focus of this article is how his interest has sparked him to create a business in return furthering his passion. Readers would recognize Ryan as a devoted kid with strict visions because of the sentence “Though Ryan loves animals, his career goal, for now, is to become a trash collector.” A tonal shift occurs after paragraph 9. Before paragraph 10, a appreciative tone is present. Ryan has received awards and recognizes his family for the help and support. Then in paragraph 10, the tone shifts to a benevolent tone, by raising funds for the Pacific Marine Mammal Center. This tonal shift reveals how Ryan is taking his appreciation to another level. Since this business has helped him grow his passion, he is generous enough to donate over a thousand dollars.
The goal of this article is to inspire other to carry out activities to cultivate your personal interests. Appeals to ethos and logos is both incorporated. Facts on how much his recycling business has made an impact is shown and personal and other individual accounts are used within the article to allow readers to formulate the personality of Ryan. For example “The moment we met him, he instantly put a smile on everyone’s faces, Michele Hunter, the center's director of animal care, said in a statement ".The intended audience would be pre-teens because they are growing up with major external influences, and to uncover an individual’s interests would first have to be trying out things so see whether he or she likes it. This article was successful because Ryan had this cheerful mindset and after years of performing this action, it has yielded him over $10,000 for college tuition.
Post #2
"Tesla recalling 53000 vehicles worldwide for brake problem"
This writer creates an causal diction with business jargon. Because the purpose of this article informs car users on a recall for some Tesla cars, the writer incorporates specialized language: gears, parking sticks, and mpg.
This article is not really making an argument rather he writes with appeals to logos to deliver the news that 2% of 53,000 cars built from February to October 2016 are being recalled by Tesla. I notice he loves to use commas to hold additional detail. For example "Tesla, based in Palo Alto, delivered 76,230 S and X in 2016" and "The main supplier of the parking brakes to Tesla is Brembo, an Italian company, but the automaker did not specify which supplier it was faulting for this problem". This contributes to the business jargon because in the business/sales industry people constantly use numbers and details to break the news.
There is a positive informative tone found in this article. Mitchell describes no injury has resulted from this faulty brake. So, his goal is to write with the intent to inform current Tesla owners about this recall so if they are affected by this small recall, safety concerns can be eliminated.
A major appeal that the writer incorporates in his piece is appeals to logos. All of Mitchell's writing displays this pattern. He is a car enthusiast with publications ranging from Business Week to Wired. He continually tries to inform the audience of statistics from the percentage of cars affected to cars being produced in 2018. He also concludes this article with a statistic "The automaker's shares fell $3.01 or 1%, to $302.51 on Thursday. The writer does an effective job in delivering his message. The facts he provides is concise and relevant to the topic. Although, the article was not lengthy, his aim was achieved.
This article is not really making an argument rather he writes with appeals to logos to deliver the news that 2% of 53,000 cars built from February to October 2016 are being recalled by Tesla. I notice he loves to use commas to hold additional detail. For example "Tesla, based in Palo Alto, delivered 76,230 S and X in 2016" and "The main supplier of the parking brakes to Tesla is Brembo, an Italian company, but the automaker did not specify which supplier it was faulting for this problem". This contributes to the business jargon because in the business/sales industry people constantly use numbers and details to break the news.
There is a positive informative tone found in this article. Mitchell describes no injury has resulted from this faulty brake. So, his goal is to write with the intent to inform current Tesla owners about this recall so if they are affected by this small recall, safety concerns can be eliminated.
A major appeal that the writer incorporates in his piece is appeals to logos. All of Mitchell's writing displays this pattern. He is a car enthusiast with publications ranging from Business Week to Wired. He continually tries to inform the audience of statistics from the percentage of cars affected to cars being produced in 2018. He also concludes this article with a statistic "The automaker's shares fell $3.01 or 1%, to $302.51 on Thursday. The writer does an effective job in delivering his message. The facts he provides is concise and relevant to the topic. Although, the article was not lengthy, his aim was achieved.
Post #3
"Government issues 'urgent' hover board warning after fatal fire"
This article carries a formal diction. The article contains no slang or contractions except from the personal statements to keeps the statements as original. Words like “blaze” are used instead of fire to describe the fire wasn’t slight, it was rather large and fierce causing fatalities. It was moving how Erin Dooley offers the attempt of an older sibling to save her 2-year-old sister - “The resulting blaze killed 2-year-old Ashanti Hughes and 10-year-old Savannah Dominick, who reportedly ran upstairs to help her younger relatives escape the smoke and flames.”
Onomatopoeia is used to describe the initial reaction by a hoverboard before it killed two kids and an adult. The device employed creates imagery because after the onomatopoeia, exploded into flames is in quotes, producing a rundown before the house in Pennsylvania was plagued by a fire.
There is a cautionary tone through the article. From start to end, the message being conveyed is these hoverboard companies exist only to economically benefit from consumers, and take no criticism or responsibility for death created by their products. In the closing sentence, “Multiple attempts by ABC News to contact LayZ Board were unsuccessful” creates the image of a careless company finding not fault. One thing readers can take away from this is to take action by removing these hoverboards from the home.
The goal of this article is to inform families that have hoverboards imported from China can be potential life-threatening. The agency states there have been more than 100 nonfatal incidents in in across 39 states manufactured by a variety of companies. Because this is the first reported fatality, this issue is seriously being considered.
This writer skillfully incorporates all three appeals into her article. Although the article is not lengthy, Erin Dooley manages to include statements from the family and facts about the hover board. In this article, she presents the consequence of these faulty battery operated hover boards then develops the argument that the company, LayZ Board, is not cooperating with the government to recall or stop productions of these hover boards to prevent fatalities like this one. The grandfather of the family says “My granddaughter, we can’t replace her. The pain is so deep” By providing statements from the victim’s family serves to create a voice, demanding the company that this product isn’t safe, and the best thing to do is stop production and recall these hover boards.
Onomatopoeia is used to describe the initial reaction by a hoverboard before it killed two kids and an adult. The device employed creates imagery because after the onomatopoeia, exploded into flames is in quotes, producing a rundown before the house in Pennsylvania was plagued by a fire.
There is a cautionary tone through the article. From start to end, the message being conveyed is these hoverboard companies exist only to economically benefit from consumers, and take no criticism or responsibility for death created by their products. In the closing sentence, “Multiple attempts by ABC News to contact LayZ Board were unsuccessful” creates the image of a careless company finding not fault. One thing readers can take away from this is to take action by removing these hoverboards from the home.
The goal of this article is to inform families that have hoverboards imported from China can be potential life-threatening. The agency states there have been more than 100 nonfatal incidents in in across 39 states manufactured by a variety of companies. Because this is the first reported fatality, this issue is seriously being considered.
This writer skillfully incorporates all three appeals into her article. Although the article is not lengthy, Erin Dooley manages to include statements from the family and facts about the hover board. In this article, she presents the consequence of these faulty battery operated hover boards then develops the argument that the company, LayZ Board, is not cooperating with the government to recall or stop productions of these hover boards to prevent fatalities like this one. The grandfather of the family says “My granddaughter, we can’t replace her. The pain is so deep” By providing statements from the victim’s family serves to create a voice, demanding the company that this product isn’t safe, and the best thing to do is stop production and recall these hover boards.
Post #4
"UT-Austin stabbing suspect reportedly suffered from mental health issues: Police"
A slight formal everyday diction is used. Because the article is describing a horrific event, the writer uses a formal diction because Emily Shapiro does not use contractions, or slang to describe the UT-Austin stabbing. This was skillfully done to have an aspect of respect for the victims and the family who has to suffer the news their loved one was stabbed. Other than that, the words used are not sophistically hard to understand. This allows for a broader audience. The tone is also influenced by the personal accounts in quotations that carries a sincere tone.
In the second paragraph, as Emily Shapiro is developing the news she employs dashes.
In the second paragraph, as Emily Shapiro is developing the news she employs dashes.
- The suspect, Kendrex White, allegedly kicked a female student out of his way on campus on Monday, then stabbed four male students — one fatally — UT-Austin Chief of Police David Carter said at a press conference today.
A gloomy tone is apparent because of the incident being described. Of course, the death of innocent individuals evokes the emotion of sorrow. The purpose of writing this piece was to inform this event wasn’t pure hate. In the opening paragraphs, the writer informs readers that this suspect could be potential be suffering from a mental illness. Later, in the article the writer incorporates police statement "This was not a conspiracy," he said, becoming emotional. "This was not a person that had a vendetta against any particular group." To reemphasize, this was not a hate act.
Argument through appeals- In the beginning the writer appeals to logos to share the facts as this news is developing. Then later she appeals to pathos by incorporating various statements from police, students, and the family’s account.
Argument through appeals- In the beginning the writer appeals to logos to share the facts as this news is developing. Then later she appeals to pathos by incorporating various statements from police, students, and the family’s account.
Post #5
"Microsoft takes aim at Google with laptop, slim Windows"
In this article, standard diction is created. This article is being addressed to a well-educated audience so the diction does not include slang or contractions. The diction is not formal because the writer does not have use elevated language, either abstract or figurative words. The writer does not seem to have an emotional attachment. Rather, the writers job is to inform new technological improvements such as this new Microsoft slim Windows 10 S laptop. Phrases like slimmed-down Windows, adding a coding feature, and starting at $999 produces a didactic tone. Because the writer informs the audience with appeals to logos, the phrases with technological jargon adds to the didactic tone. The writer is cheerful about this development through the opening sentence. “’Microsoft is taking aim at Google as it introduced a Surface device for students and slimmed down Windows for the classroom.” Then, the writer branches off by describing its capability to perform to a Mac, other announcements about the laptop, and the price is identical compared to its competitors.
This was written to inform technology users about the new Surface Laptop by Microsoft. Of course, the targeted audience is technology users. The goal he tries to aim is to inform and possibly persuade technology users that the new Surface Laptop is a direct competitor to the new Mac laptops. It can be noted that this writer admires writing in complex sentences. For example:
This was written to inform technology users about the new Surface Laptop by Microsoft. Of course, the targeted audience is technology users. The goal he tries to aim is to inform and possibly persuade technology users that the new Surface Laptop is a direct competitor to the new Mac laptops. It can be noted that this writer admires writing in complex sentences. For example:
- Microsoft is adding a coding feature to Minecraft Education, the offshoot of its wildly popular creator game.
- The laptop comes at a rough time for the Surface line, which Microsoft blamed for the small revenue shortfall in its latest quarterly report.
- The laptop runs Windows 10 S, a streamlined version of the ubiquitous operating system.
Post #6
"Jimmy Kimmel spotlights son's rare heart birth defect"
In her article, Gillian Mohney focuses on Jimmy Kimmel, a comedian, host of Jimmy Kimmel Live. She shows empathy by starting the article with “In an emotional monologue on his show...”. She characterizes Kimmel’s sadden diagnosis with the use of words like “rare”, “potentially dangerous”, and “tears” as they will evoke emotions. Next, she incorporates Jimmy Kimmel’s viewpoint after his son’s birth. Especially after describing the physical appearance of his newborn as “was a bit purple” and “something was wrong with his heart” implies it must have been catastrophic to hear this as a father.
Mohney creates precise diction by including proper nouns, surgical jargon, and answering the question on how often does it occur, what are the symptoms, and How is it treated? Words like “placenta”, “cyanotic”, “Tet spells”, and “heart murmur” are used create the surgical jargon. When discussing tetralogy of fallot with pulmonary atresia (heart disease), Mohney appeals to logos. For example “Tetrology of fallot is estimated to occur in about 5 for every 10,000 births, according to the national Institutes of Health”. Furthermore, in the closing of this article, Mohney writes “Dr. Karen Kagha is a dermatology resident and a resident at ABC News Medical Unit”. This appeal to ethos reconfirms that the information just presented comes from a valid source.
A tonal shift is present after the fifth paragraph. In the last sentence of the fifth paragraph, the sentence reads “The initial surgery went well but Kimmel said his son will need at least two surgeries in the future”. This sentence has a fearful tone. Kimmel must accept the news. Then following that paragraph, the sixth paragraph only has one sentence- “Here’s a look at the rare birth defect and how they’re being detected. Now, the tone has shifted to a didactic tone. Mohney uses a tonal shift to convey there is hope to prevent this disease early.
Ultimately, Mohney’s goal is to shed light on this disease and informing parents if they happen to stumble across similar symptoms as described, then they should be concerned. The targeted audience is for upcoming parents. Jimmy Kimmel was brought to tears as he described his son’s disease on Jimmy Kimmel Live! This aim of informing the targeted audience was effectively achieved because of the clear facts laid on the table for the audience to consider.
Both appeals to logos and ethos is dominant. With appeals to logos, this creates a didactic tone. Mohney likes the technique of stating a fact then following up with the phrase “according to…”. In the beginning of the article, she delivers the news that Kimmel’s baby was diagnosed with a rare heart disease. Then uses this to explain what this condition consists of, and ultimately shifts its attention from the baby to the disease itself.
Mohney creates precise diction by including proper nouns, surgical jargon, and answering the question on how often does it occur, what are the symptoms, and How is it treated? Words like “placenta”, “cyanotic”, “Tet spells”, and “heart murmur” are used create the surgical jargon. When discussing tetralogy of fallot with pulmonary atresia (heart disease), Mohney appeals to logos. For example “Tetrology of fallot is estimated to occur in about 5 for every 10,000 births, according to the national Institutes of Health”. Furthermore, in the closing of this article, Mohney writes “Dr. Karen Kagha is a dermatology resident and a resident at ABC News Medical Unit”. This appeal to ethos reconfirms that the information just presented comes from a valid source.
A tonal shift is present after the fifth paragraph. In the last sentence of the fifth paragraph, the sentence reads “The initial surgery went well but Kimmel said his son will need at least two surgeries in the future”. This sentence has a fearful tone. Kimmel must accept the news. Then following that paragraph, the sixth paragraph only has one sentence- “Here’s a look at the rare birth defect and how they’re being detected. Now, the tone has shifted to a didactic tone. Mohney uses a tonal shift to convey there is hope to prevent this disease early.
Ultimately, Mohney’s goal is to shed light on this disease and informing parents if they happen to stumble across similar symptoms as described, then they should be concerned. The targeted audience is for upcoming parents. Jimmy Kimmel was brought to tears as he described his son’s disease on Jimmy Kimmel Live! This aim of informing the targeted audience was effectively achieved because of the clear facts laid on the table for the audience to consider.
Both appeals to logos and ethos is dominant. With appeals to logos, this creates a didactic tone. Mohney likes the technique of stating a fact then following up with the phrase “according to…”. In the beginning of the article, she delivers the news that Kimmel’s baby was diagnosed with a rare heart disease. Then uses this to explain what this condition consists of, and ultimately shifts its attention from the baby to the disease itself.
Post #7
"California teen describes his road from Compton to Harvard University"
The article carries a jovial tone because a teen from Compton was able to accomplish his dream. Miller creates everyday diction to appeal to a larger audience. She uses details such as "One of the most active students on the school campus" and "Means the world" his quote by which he lives Hard work is the one thing that can ultimately change lives".
This article was published in order to celebrate the Class of 2017 across the nation. In Miller's article, she incorporates Michelle Obama's motivational speech for seniors experiencing a major step in their lives. In addition, to celebrate this, Good Morning America (GMA) shared a story of a high school senior accomplishment from attending Chadwick School to Harvard University. She states the accomplishment without fluff, and skillfully uses the teen's personal observation to attract readers to read more.
Miller constructs her article with numerous amounts of appeals to pathos from start to end. In the opening sentence, she gets to the point by addressing Elijah Devaughn Jr., a high school senior, was accepted to one of the lowest accepting colleges in the nation. After declaring this major accomplishment from a young gentlemen, Miller makes it clear his journey wasn't ordinary. He was raised up in a city plagued by gun violence and gang activity for decades. In addition, the audience are given insight on his childhood. A boy without a father for the most of his childhood, if he was asked " Where is your dad?" his reply was "He is in Hawaii on a business trip" just to find his identity and fit in. Elijah shares his personal opinion for others experiencing something similar to his situation- "Just work hard in whatever you do and embrace who you are."
This article was published in order to celebrate the Class of 2017 across the nation. In Miller's article, she incorporates Michelle Obama's motivational speech for seniors experiencing a major step in their lives. In addition, to celebrate this, Good Morning America (GMA) shared a story of a high school senior accomplishment from attending Chadwick School to Harvard University. She states the accomplishment without fluff, and skillfully uses the teen's personal observation to attract readers to read more.
Miller constructs her article with numerous amounts of appeals to pathos from start to end. In the opening sentence, she gets to the point by addressing Elijah Devaughn Jr., a high school senior, was accepted to one of the lowest accepting colleges in the nation. After declaring this major accomplishment from a young gentlemen, Miller makes it clear his journey wasn't ordinary. He was raised up in a city plagued by gun violence and gang activity for decades. In addition, the audience are given insight on his childhood. A boy without a father for the most of his childhood, if he was asked " Where is your dad?" his reply was "He is in Hawaii on a business trip" just to find his identity and fit in. Elijah shares his personal opinion for others experiencing something similar to his situation- "Just work hard in whatever you do and embrace who you are."